No thankyou, not my cup of tea. You are ending on a floating line. Thats, well, its not how it is done normally, but if it works, sure leave it that way. I would test it but i have no paladins fallen or otherwise atm.
Ted: it gives a random 'Goodbye' or 'I have to go now' ending and it is commonly used in many original dialouges... and i tested it with a lvl1 paladin with improved health and consoled rapier+2(he hit a critical 21 on those frogs) he just can't die(even when grappled) just teleport him there and talk to Darley, it does look a lot better when actually talking to her. tho i'm thinking about adding a bit more content to her dialouge.