Grey world

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  1. Emirkol the Chaotic

    Emirkol the Chaotic Proud Polytheist

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    The buzz of the alarm clock cuts through my brain, dragging me from whatever subconscious nightmare I was having into the conscious nightmare of reality.

    I lay in bed, not moving. Just staring at the cracks in the ceiling for what could have been the millionth time. I can't remember anymore. I don't even care to remember.

    I move, automatically, on auto pilot. Like i do every morning. I go through the routines. Washing, shaving, shitting. They've blended together in my mind. Simple task, now so mundane and repetitive that my waking mind barely registers the act.

    I find sustenance. It's unsatisfying. Bland. No taste. I haven't enjoyed food for so long it seems. I'd stop, but the body demands to be fed, even if the mind no longer cares.

    I leave the house. Treading and re-treading the same path day after day after day to work. One foot in front of the other. Never making eye contact. Never raising my head. The sky is grey outside. It matches my own world. The grey world where I've lived so long.

    I move through the crowds. Uncaring. Unfeeling. Unnoticed. Others pass by, giving me a wide berth, not our of fear or disgust. I'm just an obstacle. An inanimate object disguised as a man. Not worthy of mention or even a second glance. They're grey people too, just like me. I continue on.

    Amy, the office receptionist greets me as I walk in. Her smile and cheerful hello are nothing but pre-programmed responses. Her eyes are dead and flat. There's no emotion in her smile or greeting. Just the same tired apathy as all the rest. Yet another resident of this grey world. I nod my hello. Pure reflex. Nothing more. No eye contact. No chance for a few moments of worthless banter.

    I sit down at my desk. Staring once again, blankly, at the monitor in front of me. My hand slips into my jacket pocket. Slowly and gently caressing the cold metal of the pistol secured there.

    I live in a grey world.

    It's time to bring some colour into it.



    A Story by Emirkol the Chaotic
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  2. Emirkol the Chaotic

    Emirkol the Chaotic Proud Polytheist

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    Yet another little "story" that came to mind late last night. Here for you're enjoyment.

    Feedback welcome, but not necessary! :thumbsup:
     
  3. Scryler

    Scryler Night's Wordsmith

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    Is there more?
     
  4. blackwind

    blackwind Established Member

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    Yeah what she said:)

    I liked it!
     
  5. Emirkol the Chaotic

    Emirkol the Chaotic Proud Polytheist

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    WOW. And Thanks!

    I'm not sure I'm totally happy with it. There were a few more "details and descriptions" that I was going to include. However some of them faded from my memory when I was typing this. It's funny, I did this in the last 10 minutes of work on Friday! :evilgrin:

    As for more, I'm honestly not sure. It was more of a "small" story that was just rattling around my brain. Maybe. I don't want to force anything here, It may ruin the story as is.



    BTW, expect one or two more "small" stories in the future. Nothing epic, but enjoyable (I hope), nonetheless.
     
  6. Shiningted

    Shiningted I changed this damn title, finally! Administrator

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    More? I think it is pretty self-contained: I don't think I want to know more... :nervous:

    Well done Emirkol, not easy to tell a good story so briefly :thumbsup:
     
  7. Emirkol the Chaotic

    Emirkol the Chaotic Proud Polytheist

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    Thank you very much, Ted!

    I confess, I did give it some thought to adding more, but the few ideas that came to mind would have detracted and cheapened the story, rather than added to it.
     
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    Gaear Bastard Maestro Administrator

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    No more would be best in this case. Don't want any watchdog agencies seeing red flags on random internet search string inquiries.
     
  9. Emirkol the Chaotic

    Emirkol the Chaotic Proud Polytheist

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    Yours is the most intriguing reply so far.

    OK, you've all got my curiousity peaked. What would you like? What wouldn't you like?

    Something new perhaps? Darker? Bloodier?

    There's a ToEE idea brewing......

    I'm beginning to have fun with this! You people are awesome!
     
  10. blackwind

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    Darker sir.
     
  11. Emirkol the Chaotic

    Emirkol the Chaotic Proud Polytheist

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    Oh, be VERY careful with your requests. :evilgrin:

    I can go darker, disturbingly darker.
     
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